Here are some suggestions to make the script excerpt more descriptive and easier to film:
- Add more details about the setting and surroundings. For example, describe the condition of the river bank, any vegetation or landmarks nearby, the weather, time of day, etc.
- Provide more physical descriptions of the characters. For example, note their clothing, hair color, approximate age, distinguishing features, etc.
- Include more specific dialogue. For example, have the characters refer to each other by name or note non-verbal reactions like a puzzled look.
- Add shot directions or transitions. For example, indicate a close-up on the dead fish or cut to a wide shot showing the chemical plant in the distance.