Creating effective web content in plain language
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The document emphasizes the importance of writing web content in plain language to enhance user understanding and engagement. It highlights strategies for effective communication, focusing on audience needs, reducing jargon, and creating a dialogue through user-friendly design. Key principles include keeping content concise, using strong verbs, and avoiding unnecessary information to facilitate users' decision-making processes online.
Creating effective web content in plain language
- 1. Writing for the web Creating persuasive web content in plain language Annetta Cheek Kath Straub 16April2013
- 2. What is plain language?
- 3. A document or website is in plain language If readers or viewer can easily • Find what they need • Understand it • Use it to fulfill their purpose What does “In plain language” mean?
- 4. In plain language does NOT mean • Writing to the lowest common denominator • Avoiding all technical words • Being imprecise What does “In plain language” mean?
- 5. Example After Katrina, FEMA received this question I just found out that the products I have been using to clean my home are toxic! Have I damaged my health by using these products? Here’s how FEMA responded on their website – do you think they gave the important information, and only the important information?
- 6. FEMA’s answer Answer: First of all, what is meant by toxicity? Somewhere on the order of 70,000 different chemicals have been identified as toxic. A chemical produces a toxic effect at concentrations that alter the normal state of the organism. For many chemicals, there is a dose at which there are no toxic effects, there is a dose at which the effects are reversible, and there is a dose at which the effects may have permanent consequences. An example of some toxic chemicals that many of us are exposed to regularly are caffeine, tobacco, and alcohol. At doses normally consumed by the average person, the "high" effect felt by the individual response can be quite different. One person may be able to drink 5 cups of coffee with out visible effects, while another person might get the shakes after 2 cups of coffee. This is an example of how the dose and response varies from one person to the next. At some point, each of these chemicals can have a much more serious effect on the individual. At extremely high doses . . . And this went on for another 10 lines.
- 7. Example from a real Regulation Before When the process of freeing a stuck vehicle that has been stuck results in ruts or holes, the operator will fill the rut or hole created by such activity before removing the vehicle from the immediate area. After If you make a hole while freeing a stuck vehicle, you must fill the hole before you drive away. (National Park Service regulation)
- 8. The key to plain language is understanding your audience • Who is your audience? • What do they already know? • What do they still need to know? How can you help them get where (you know) they need to go
- 9. URBAN LEGEND: People don’t read on the web EXPLANATION: People don’t read on the web when what we write does not fit their needs. Eyetracking Image showing user reading a long text-y page carefully.
- 10. Where we are going with this Good web content sets up a dialogue • Talk about things I (need to) care about • Know what I already know • Hold my hand • Guide me, don’t lecture me • Don’t overwhelm me • Maybe even, … make it fun
- 11. What does it mean to design a dialogue?
- 16. The evolution of self-service design Used car salesmen and desk clerks Websites Usable websites Conversations made possible by technology 1980 2020 We are about here Help me get things done Help me do things
- 17. When we say “transition to self-service,” we don’t really mean do it yourself… even on the web.
- 19. • READSMART Smile, You're in the Dental Care Aisle http://www.nytimes.com/2005/08/06/business/06shortcuts.html
- 20. • READSMART Smile, You're in the Dental Care Aisle http://www.nytimes.com/2005/08/06/business/06shortcuts.html I have LOSS AVERSION in the toothbrush aisle
- 21. My mental model for getting a toothbrush includes a guide
- 22. • READSMART
- 26. Two big changes 1. We make more choices from larger choice sets 2. We make them alone…. or with the web as our guide.
- 27. Act on it Understand what I found Find what I need Web design needs to evolve The old good: A website is good if people can find what they need, understand what they found and act on it effectively. But, this assumes that I know what I’m looking for.
- 28. Act on it Understand what I found Find what I need New “good design” needs to support self-service Figure out what I want The new good: A website works if it helps people figure out what they need to do or ask, find the relevant Information, understand what they found and act on it effectively.
- 29. Act on it Understand what I found Find what I need New “good design” needs to support self-service Figure out what I need/want 1. Diagnose 2. Guide 3. Facilitate The new good: The web “asks” and understands what I want and need. And then helps, based on that.
- 30. What does this look like on the web?
- 31. • READSMART
- 32. • READSMART
- 33. • READSMART
- 35. • READSMART
- 36. But there is still a disconnect. There is no web kiosk in the toothpaste aisle.
- 37. How will we know what to say?
- 38. Step 1: Recognize your bias You know too much. And you probably give other people the benefit of the doubt that they know what you do.
- 39. Participants can find the answers to key questions on the site, when directed to. But, most were not motivated to do that—or to request their free credit reports—before to the usability test. We have hypotheses for why: 1. Credit reports are mirrors that people don’t want to face. 2. Advertising and experience influences consumer expectations about “free” 3. People don’t understand how reviewing/monitoring their credit reports will benefit them. All are viable reasons for the low motivation. Since the site can potentially address it, our research explored #3. Step 2: Understand your audience .
- 40. Research Insight: Our content will have to (re-)educate Urban legend Reality My credit report is like a report card. It is an immutable snapshot of my credit history. Your credit report may contain errors that should be fixed. I have one credit score. You have three, potentially very different scores. (And soon, possibly more) All my credit reports will be the same. Or The different credit reporting companies sell the same report. Each credit reporting company collects information from different organizations. You need to check all 3 reports The credit reporting agencies are the enemy holding me back.* You and the organizations that provide you credit are responsible for your score. The CRAs are just the messengers. Emerging: My credit card company will alert me if anything out of the ordinary is happening. That is enough. Some credit card companies do that for some customers.
- 41. Step 3: Create the conversation Urban legend: Rotating carousels (or hero boxes) are always bad. Reality: If you know how users will interact with them, you can use rotating carousels to a specific end.
- 42. Step 3: Show them how it will work
- 43. Step 3: Show them what to do
- 44. Step 3: Help users connect the dots (that you take for granted)
- 45. Step 4: Check to see if they can do it (“Old” usability)
- 46. Step 4: Ask them if they really understood it (Content testing)
- 47. How do I know it is in plain language?
- 48. Writing goals vary on different pages within websites. • Homepages • Navigation pages • Hybrid pages • Content pages We are talking about designing content.
- 50. For things we don’t get to … Do this • Keep it short • Organize content logically • Use headings as sign posts • Use strong verbs, including active voice • Use pronouns • Use common words • Design tables, matrices to guide decisions Avoid these • Abbreviations, jargon, legal terms, Latin • Confusing constructions • 3 or more nouns in a row • Excess words • Information the audience doesn’t need to know
- 51. Today we will focus on .. Do this • Keep it short • Organize content logically • Use headings as sign posts • Use strong verbs, including active voice • Use pronouns • Use common words • Design tables, matrices to guide decisions Avoid these • Abbreviations, jargon, legal terms, Latin • Confusing constructions • 3 or more nouns in a row • Excess words • Information the audience doesn’t need to know
- 52. For things we don’t cover Federal Plain Language Guidelines http://www.plainlanguage.gov/howto/guidelines/ FederalPLGuidelines/TOC.cfm
- 54. Reduce • Words on the page • Sentence length • Paragraphs length • # of Pages • Omit wordy phrases.
- 55. Omit wordy phrases Phrases to look for: • Doublets (cease and desist) • Redundancies (at this point in time) • Prepositional phrases
- 56. Omit wordy phrases r Replace this … With this … At a later time Later During that time period During that time, or then Worked jointly together Worked together Level of coverage Coverage Will plan in the future Will plan At least 12 years of age or older At least 12 For the purpose of For, to At this point in time Now In an effort to To X On the grounds that Because On a monthly basis Monthly
- 57. Reduce sentence length • Written material: 20 words or fewer average • On the web: 10 words or fewer average
- 58. Examples: Long sentences The 12-month in business requirement can be waived if the borrower’s key personnel can demonstrate export expertise and successful previous business experience and the lender uses conventional commercial loan underwriting procedures and does not rely solely on credit scoring. 39 words Federal support for wind and solar energy, biofuels, and other renewable energy sources, which has been estimated at several billion dollars per year, is fragmented because 23 agencies implemented hundreds of renewable energy initiatives in fiscal year 2010—the latest year for which GAO developed these original data. 48 words
- 59. Examples: Long sentences (Data.gov) Here you will find hundreds of government datasets that can help enable consumer choice; apps that demonstrate the power of Smart Disclosure; challenges for app developers; and resources to learn more about Smart Disclosure. 34 words Today’s most important choices involve a complicated array of options, whether you’re looking for health insurance, educational opportunities, housing, financial products, energy providers, airline flights, or other products and services. 30 words
- 60. GOAL: Avoid walls of words
- 61. Walls of words
- 62. Walls of words
- 63. Walls of words
- 64. Walls of words
- 65. Not a wall of words
- 66. Not a wall of words
- 67. Not a wall of words
- 69. Our favorite long page: AARP
- 70. AARP keeps going ….
- 71. AARP: … and going
- 72. AARP: But wait … there’s more!
- 73. AARP: … and MORE!
- 74. Not a Myth: Readers read more near the top of your page. The longer the page, the lower the percent they read. How much of this do you think most (any?) people see?
- 75. Deciding where to start on the AARP website is a bit like deciding which shop to visit in a South East Asian strip mall.
- 76. Keep content to one screen • Readers may scroll, but they read less farther down
- 77. Your screens: Content on one screen
- 78. Your sites: Content on one screen
- 79. Your sites: Content on one screen
- 80. Your sites: Content on one screen
- 82. Use common words Avoid • uncommon words • bureaucratic words • foreign words • legal terms • terms of art • Even highly educated people read faster and with better comprehension if you stick with common words. • Difficult words do not make you look smarter • “Common” does not mean “short”!
- 83. Replace this … With this … Instruct Tell Receive Get Obtain Get Assistance Help Facilitate Help Retain Keep Examples
- 84. Resources – Common words http://www.plainlanguage.gov/howto/wordsuggestions/ simplewords.cfm
- 85. Uncommon words glued together confuse people even more. Examples from your work: • Enterprise infrastructure solution • Sector protection efforts • Formulates targeted notice programs grounded in . . . • Cloud Enabler • End-to-end mobile application solutions • Potentially duplicative asset management activities • Mission specific domain expertise
- 86. http://www.wordcount.org/main.php It is important to know where the corpus comes from. This corpus is British..
- 87. For the scientific purists and people with too much time. http://www.wordfrequency.info/
- 89. MYTH :All jargon is bad. Good jargon Well understood words used inside a group that facilitate communication within that group If you are writing for rocket scientists, speak rocket science
- 90. Bad jargon is typically technical language that has escaped to the real world…
- 91. Abbreviations • Readers hate abbreviations • Abbreviations turn your material into a research project for your reader If you have to shorten things, use “nicknames” that have some meaningful content.
- 92. Use nicknames instead of abbreviations For Instead of Use Interagency resource advisory committee IRAC Advisory committee New England Quality Care Alliance NEQCA Alliance, or Care Alliance Central Valley Regional Health Trust CVRHT Regional Trust
- 93. Examples from your writing… • Agile • Resonating • APY (not defined) • Optimization • Tier • Termination (unless you’ve killed somebody)
- 94. Use strong verbs • Verbs are the strongest word type in English, so use lots of strong ones. Goal: Use strong verbs
- 95. Weak verbs • Passive voice • Hidden verbs • Subjunctive • Complex forms like perfect tenses • Simple present is the strongest verb tense.
- 96. Passive voice People read passive sentences slower than active sentences. Active sentences are more common than passive sentences. Active sentences Noun Verb Noun Doer Action to Do-ee The cat chased the dog. Passive sentences Noun Verb Noun Doer Action to Do-ee The dog was chased by the cat
- 97. Present tense Strong verbs Simple tense Simple present is the strongest verb tense
- 98. Hidden verbs • Hidden verbs are verbs disguised as nouns - they are longer and weaker than verbs. • Hidden verbs are one of the biggest problems in bureaucratic writing.
- 99. Passive voice may not identify the actor.* • Reports were written. • Decisions were issued. • Mistakes were made. * Writers use this strategy to avoid saying who is responsible.
- 100. Examples Replace this … With this … Conduct an analysis Analyze Present a report Report Make a recommendation Recommend Provide assistance Help The use of Using
- 101. Examples from your sites • facilitate the delivery of • provide assistance and coordination • enhance their collaboration • provides an overview • undertakes an analysis of
- 102. GOAL: Don’t say too much
- 103. Remove content people don’t need • Web content is a conversation with your customer. If material doesn’t belong in the conversation, it doesn’t belong on the web. • You aren’t Santa Claus. You can’t serve all customers. Serve the 2 or 3 most important ones – at the most. • Challenge every word. If you don’t need it, get rid of it.
- 104. What does this really say?
- 105. What does this really say? If you’ve been arrested and you can’t afford a lawyer, we can help you.
- 106. How is knowing this level of detail helping me? What SBA Offers to Help Small Businesses Grow What does SBA offer to small business owners? The programs are many and varied, and the qualifications for each are specific. SBA can help facilitate a loan for you with a third party lender, guarantee a bond, or help you find venture capital. Understanding how SBA works is the first step towards receiving assistance. SBA’s Role SBA provides a number of financial assistance programs for small businesses that have been specifically designed to meet key financing needs, including debt financing, surety bonds, and equity financing. You can Start here and not miss anything.
- 107. Does the reader need to know this? • The content and organization of the Aviation Safety web pages was inspired by the "Pillars" of the Safety Management Systems (SMS). The resources provided are grouped into the areas of Promotion, Risk Management, Assurance and Policy to reflect the four pillars of SMS. • SMS can be utilized as a means of providing a formal process and structure to control the risk associated with the vast array of aviation missions. • It is the goal of SMS to create a positive safety culture where participants continually challenge the processes, the culture and the systems to identify weaknesses and where improvements can be made. This web site was created with the intent of providing relevant and current information, facilitate opportunities to capture the wealth of operational knowledge and experience from the aviation community and to link learning with training so we may actively take steps toward reaching that goal. Visuals should help users identify and understand key content.
- 108. US embassy websites around the world say this Security Notice for Visitors to the Embassy and the Consulates In order to ensure everyone's safety and to ensure that security screening does not delay entrance in to the Consulate and planned interviews, no electronic devices, including cell telephones, may be brought into the Embassy or Consulate. Large backpacks, suitcases and glass containers are also not permitted. Security personnel will not store items for applicants and will confiscate all weapons. We therefore suggest that all such items be left at home, in a locked car, or with a friend or relative who remains outside the premises. Documents relevant to the visa and/or passport application are the only items that we encourage applicants to bring with them. Your cooperation will help to ensure everyone's safety and will help us to ensure that we are able to interview you as quickly as possible.
- 109. US embassy websites around the world could say this Security Notice for Visitors to the Embassy and the Consulates In order to ensure everyone's safety and to ensure that security screening does not delay entrance in to the Consulate and planned interviews, no electronic devices, including cell telephones, may be brought into the Embassy or Consulate. Large backpacks, suitcases and glass containers are also not permitted. Security personnel will not store items for applicants and will confiscate all weapons. We therefore suggest that all such items be left at home, in a locked car, or with a friend or relative who remains outside the premises. Documents relevant to the visa and/or passport application are the only items that we encourage applicants to bring with them. Your cooperation will help to ensure everyone's safety and will help us to ensure that we are able to interview you as quickly as possible. Security Notice - Embassy and Consulates Visitors To ensure safety and reduce waiting time, the Embassy limits limits the items you can bring into the building. Do bring • Documents relevant to your visa and/or passport application. Do not bring • Electronic devices, including cell telephones • Large backpacks and suitcases • Glass containers • Weapons of any type The gate staff can’t hold items for you.
- 110. This is probably Too Much Information (TMI)
- 111. Let’s rewrite this paragraph Call our toll-free number In addition to using our website, you can call us toll-free At 1-800-772-1213. We treat all calls confidentially. We can answer specific questions from 7 a.m. to 7 p.m., Monday through Friday. Generally, you’ll have a shorter wait time if you call during the week after Tuesday. We can provide information by automated phone service 24 hours a day. (You can use our automated response system to tell us a new address or request a replacement Medicare card.) If you are deaf or hard of hearing, you may call our TTY number, 1-800-325-0778. 97 words
- 112. We think it could look like this: Call us toll-free anytime at 1-800-772-1213. From 7 a.m. to 7 p.m., Monday through Friday you can talk to a staff person. At other times you’ll reach our automated system. Use it to give us a new address or ask for a replacement Medicare card.) All calls are confidential. TTY number 1-800-325-0778. 52 words
- 113. Information your users (probably) don’t need • When Director office was formed • Who is the Director • What the Director said the day he was sworn in • What the Director looks like • What your annual report from 3 years ago looked like • How the County government is organized • What you did for customers 5 years ago • The text of a law that authorizes your office
- 114. Reality check If you aren’t sure if you need the information, ask yourself: Will Kath’s mom care?
- 115. Back at the conversation (10K ft)
- 116. Create a conversation that motivates your users • Help me connect the dots • Remind me why I care • Remind me what to do • Make it easy • Make me accountable • Reward me
- 117. GAMIFICATION IS JUST BEHAVIORAL MODIFICATION REBRANDED
- 118. . Now = 6:42am EST today
- 119. Zynga made 3 things acceptable Begging Bragging Tiny Victories
- 120. Behavioral change means using reinforcement to get people to learn/do things that you want them to do that they probably wouldn’t do otherwise.
- 121. Positive: Add something Negative: Take something away Reinforcement: Increases behavior Positive reinforcement Negative reinforcement Punishment: Decreasesbehavior Positive punishment Negative punishment Remember this from Psych101?
- 122. Things that make games work. Make success into small, Incremental, visible steps.
- 123. Things that make games work. Give actionable positive feedback.
- 124. Things that make games work. Short term and long term goals are interwoven. Hint: sometimes you have to create sub-goals
- 125. Things that make games work. Make (tiny) achievements build up.
- 126. Things that make games work. Benchmarks let me compete and/or collaborate
- 127. Things that make games work. It is there when I want it. But opt in.
- 128. Game mechanics in the real world Freshbooks
- 129. A space where game mechanics could help …. How might the experience of enrolling in and picking 401/403 funds be different if you interposed feedback during the process and leveraged the interactive decision tools on the toothbrush site? What other gamification strategies could you apply?
- 131. Questions or comments Annetta Cheek alcplain@gmail.com Kath Straub kath@usability.org