Mastering commentary common mistakes
- 1. Mastering Commentary Common Mistakes
- 2. Common Mistakes 1. Too generic (elementary) 2. Drifts from the topic sentence 3. Is really concrete detail 4. Commentary repeats 5. Contradicts the topic sentence
- 3. Commentary is generic (basic, common) Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. This was mean of him. He wasn’t being nice.
- 4. Better Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. He didn’t care about hurting Doodle’s feelings by forcing him to face a symbol of his own death. All he cared about was not feeling ashamed of an invalid brother.
- 5. Commentary that Drifts from the Topic Sentence Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. He didn’t care about hurting Doodle’s feelings by forcing him to face a symbol of his own death. The coffin wasn’t even used.
- 6. Better Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. He didn’t care about hurting Doodle’s feelings by forcing him to face a symbol of his own death. He wanted to terrorize Doodle by making him realize he wasn’t supposed to live.
- 7. Commentary is really Concrete Detail Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. They were in the barn when he touched it. The parents had kept the coffin even though they didn’t need it.
- 8. Better Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. He didn’t care about hurting Doodle’s feelings by forcing him to face such a symbol of this own death. All he cared about was not being ashamed of an invalid brother.
- 9. Commentary Repeats Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. This was cruel of him to do. He didn’t have to make Doodle touch the coffin.
- 10. Better Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. This was a mean and heartless thing to do to his little brother. All he cared about was not being ashamed of an invalid brother.
- 11. Commentary Contradicts the Topic Sentence Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. Brother was just embarrassed by Doodle. He didn’t really mean to hurt his feelings.
- 12. Better Brother was cruel to Doodle when he was growing up. For example, he made him touch the coffin in the loft. He didn’t care about hurting Doodle’s feelings by forcing him to face such a symbol of this own death. All he cared about was not being ashamed of an invalid brother.
- 13. Summary 1. Too generic (elementary) 2. Drifts from the topic sentence 3. Is really concrete detail 4. Commentary repeats 5. Contradicts the topic sentence