2 page script with feedback
- 1. Script with Feedback INT. FAMILY’S NEW HOUSE The family of four pull up to the new house in a car. The two children (girl and boy) excitedly swing open the car doors and rush to the front door of the house. Kid 1 (Darren): “Wooooahhhhh” Kid 2(Leila): “This is sooo much better than our old house” The parents move around to the back of the car to collect their bags. They then stand happily next to each other watching the children. Mother: (Quietly) “I really hope this home is better” Father: “Me too hun (luv), me too” The scene cuts to the parents walking into the house and the children in the background rushing around exploring the new house. Mother: “Kids, be careful!” Children start playing play hide and seek
- 2. upstairs Kid 1 (Darren): “Ready or not here I come” (Soft, scary, echoed voice) Intense and scary background music starts to build as Darren (Kid 1) 1 goes around the house Kid 1 (Darren) notices movement underneath a closed door which he thinks is his sister Kid 1(Darren) *tip toes quietly closer and closer towards the door As he reaches for the door handle, his sister (Kid 2 – Leila) jumps from behind him and scares him MUSIC STOPS Kid 2 (Leila): “BOOOOO!” Kid 1 (Darren): “Jesus, Leila!” (Shocked from jump scare) Kid 2 (Leila): “Dinner time now anyway!” Leila runs down the stairs after scaring her brother to go to dinner while Darren remains
- 3. confused why he saw movement in the room if his sister wasn’t there. Feedback More description of setting needed, especially at the start Would look more professionalif “Kid 1” and “Kid 2” had a name Could do with a more professionallook/layout DONE