ANALYSIS OF SECTION A and B PAPER 1 SPM
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This document provides an analysis of common errors made by students on a writing assessment. It identifies issues with formatting, contents and language, grammar, vocabulary, spelling, and following instructions. Examples of errors are given along with the corrections. Teachers are advised to remind students to proofread their work carefully and follow instructions to avoid these types of mistakes.
ANALYSIS OF SECTION A and B PAPER 1 SPM
- 2. Form 5 FIRST ASSESSMENT 2017 An analysis of common errors PAPER 1 *Based on 5SF and 5SK papers
- 3. SECTION A Who are you writing as? Concerned ABOUT? Write to OCPD of YOUR town Write a FORMAL letter on the rise in the crime rate in Taman Sena Indah
- 4. FORMAT Aina Solehah bt Amin, No 3 Taman Sena Indah, 01000 Kangar, Perlis. _________________________________________ OCPD Kangar District Police Station 01000 Kangar, Perlis. 12 Mac 2017 F1: writer and receiver’s addresses F2: appropriate salutation F3: appropriate closing F1 = 0
- 5. FORMAT • INAPPROPRIATEClosing – I want you to settle this problem quickly. • APPROPRIATE Closing I hope we can cooperate to deal with this problem I hope the police will take measurable action to settle this problem as soon as possible
- 6. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE x First, many cases of burglary. (STRINGING) x The burglary was a few cases every night. (INCORRECT VERB) x Many cases of burglary which a few cases every night. (COMBINED CONTENTS) Taman Sena Indah was shocked by many cases of burglary since last week. There were many cases of burglary reported this month.
- 7. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE x Wild parties at night. (STRINGING/SIMPLY COPYING) x Also, we need for more police patrols. (WORD DOES NOT FIT IN) Many residents has reported that there were wild parties at night. In fact, the parties usually end very late at four to five o clock in the morning. We need more police patrols to ensure the residents’ safety. There is the need to have more police patrols to work together with the residents. Besides, I suggest that mobile police vehicles to be sent to monitor the area.
- 8. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE X It is so sad, you know. Pity the victim. I really angry at the burglars. It was so bad of him. He did not have sympathy.. (TOO EMOTIONAL) X You know what? If you are the resident here, will you feel comfortable when it is noisy at night? You will help us to settle this problem, rite? (QUESTIONING/ASKING ARE NEVER ALLOWED)
- 9. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE X SUGGESTION: REPEATED SUGGESTION - I suggest the police should go around the neighbourhood to monitor the area police who go around to monitor = police patrol
- 10. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE X SUGGESTION: IRRELEVANT SUGGESTIONS -Suggestions that are not related to the police authority x Parents should send their teenage children to tuition class on weekend and not let them go out and race. x Teachers should teach the students good manners because it is not good to disturb people. x The chairman of Taman Sena Indah should make a time table for the residents to take turn in monitoring the area at night.
- 11. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE X We have asked them to lower the volume of the music. But they did not listen to us. And I suggest you to come and see with your own eyes = improper language, informal language = grammar: never start sentences with AND, BUT = CORRECTION??
- 12. SECTION B • QUESTION 1 • Describe your dream job Keyword: job DO NOT: Just write about the job and keep repeating the same point; Only few descriptions of the job; the scope of work and too much focusing on feelings
- 13. SECTION B • QUESTION 1 • Describe your dream job Keyword: job DO NOT: Just write about the job and keep repeating the same point; Only few descriptions of the job; the scope of work and too much focusing on feelings
- 14. SECTION B • QUESTION 1 • Describe your dream job Keyword: job DO NOT: Start writing with Everyone/Everybody in this world has a dream job. Same like me. So do I.
- 15. SECTION B • QUESTION 1 • Describe your dream job Keyword: job Good one: She writes about a specific job (a pastry chef); from how she first decided to become one, the descriptions of the job, the place, the people, the scope of work and reasons why she chooses the job
- 16. SECTION B • QUESTION - A story about your friend who never gives up - End your story with the given line NOT …and I said, “I am proud of you’’. After the day, I am motivated to follow her footstep and I will make sure…..
- 17. SECTION B • QUESTION 4 - A story about your friend who never gives up - Explain the problems/challenges - Elaborate the struggles/efforts - - State the name clearly; be consistent
- 18. SECTION B • QUESTION 4 - A story about your friend who never gives up - She never gives up in anything she does. - She never gives up in searching for her mother. - She never gives up in taking care of her siblings.
- 19. SECTION B • QUESTION 4 - A story about your friend who never gives up - She never gives up in anything she does. - She put all her heart and soul into searching for her mother . - She was consistently patient and responsible in taking care of her siblings.
- 20. Common Grammatical Errors ERROR CORRECTION more healthier healthier more easy easier more happy happier
- 21. Common Grammatical Errors ERROR CORRECTION The place has a beach that makes me calm. There is a beach at the place that makes me calm. The place has not many people who come. There are not many people come to the place
- 22. Common Grammatical Errors ERROR CORRECTION You cannot spend too much time on social networks. We have to make time for your family too. You cannot spend too much time on social networks. You have to make time for your family too. We cannot spend too much time on social networks. We have to make time for our family too. We need to be determined to achieve your dreams. We need to be determined to achieve our dreams. You need to be determined to achieve your dreams.
- 23. Common Grammatical Errors ERROR CORRECTION Most youngsters have their own social networks such as facebook, twitter, instagram and others/many others/another. Most youngsters have their own social networks accounts such as on Facebook, Twitter and Instagram.
- 24. Common Grammatical Errors ERROR CORRECTION A shoes A pair of shoes A shoe An enemies An enemy A new friends A new friend As a teenagers As a teenager As teenagers One of the student One of the students A lots of problems A lot of problems Lots of problems
- 25. Common Grammatical Errors ERROR CORRECTION His father was proud with him. His father was proud of him The teacher was angry to me. The teacher was angry with me. The teacher was angry at me.
- 26. *angry at
- 27. Common Vocabulary Errors / Choice of word ERROR CORRECTION Make revision Do revision Make an action Take an action You have to practise to do the questions. You have to practise to answer the questions. I would like to story about my successful friend. I would like to tell about my successful friend. I would like to tell a story about my successful friend. I very like / I very very love I really like / I extremely love
- 28. Common Spelling Errors ERROR CORRECTION Succesful Successful ? Untill ? Good morning to our principle, Pn. Aminah ? Smilling ? Peoples ? Futhermre ? Dissapointed Dissappointed ? Affect vs effect ?
- 29. PLEASE.. 1. READ the questions extra carefully 2. WRITE the Question No. in your answer sheet
- 30. SEE YOU IN YOUR NEXT WRITING GOOD LUCK!