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Assignment two
Instructor :Gary Henry
Lula Kendrick
ENG2001
Introduction

Cell phone and how they have changed us socially? This isn’t
written as a question or a complete sentence
There are some advantages and disadvantage of how cell
phoneplural hasword form changed people in society. There are
people out there that take advantage of cell phone privileges
and also there are people out there who use the cell phone in a
respectable way. The ways we uses our cell phone can take the
place of how we all interact with each other taking the place of
family time with each other. This assignment requires a focus
on the evaluation of your sources. Develop an introduction that
shows that focus.
Source
The first source I found states that having a cell phone have
made life much easier for use. In the past with the telephone
people had problems communicating and sending data to each
other but, with the discovery of cell phone we can communicate
better and sent data can be retrieved instantly. With the cell
phone we can put application in online with employer,
communicate with each other and surf the internet. The writer
also stated that there also are disadvantages of having a cell
phone in society. While driving and talking on the phone it has
caused death and injury. Students can be any were and study
for their exam by pulling up their work online through their
phones. Bankers can send money at ease without going to the
bank or through the computer. Rather than focusing on the
information in the sources, this assignment requires an
evaluation of the sources’ credibility.
The second source I ran across says that we tend to spend more
time on the cell phone texting each other whether than talk to
each other verbally. When family goes out to eat there is no
communication going on because everyone is at the table on
their phones texting, playing games, etc. The communication
between family and friends are slowly fading away all because
of the invention of the cell phone.
The third source I choose talks about how they ask couples how
the cell phone has affect their relationship. If they have their

cell phone offs it help foster closeness, connectedness,
interpersonal trust, and perceptions of empathy and help
increase the building blocks of their relationships. It serves as
a reminder of the wider network to which we can connect, and
communicate with people right next to us. They also stated that
it can also reduce our social consciousness.
Another source says that we are always connected to everyone
we are one click away. Those who have loved ones that are
always traveling are able to keep in touch with each other. If
something was to happen while you are traveling you can easily
call road side assistant whether than waiting in the next car to
come hoping the will be nice and stop offering you some help.
The reason why I choice this topic is because my search can be
as wide and broad as I want it to be. I see how people treat the
use of cell phone use each day ; ranging from hiding somewhere
in the work place too out in public cursing disrespecting the
people around them.
Lula: This draft has a focus and some information, but it
doesn’t follow the instructions or fulfill the requirements of the
assignment. This week’s essay assignment requires the
evaluation of the eight sources located in the South University
Library. In revision, locate eight sources in the library. Then
use the information in Week 1 to evaluate the credibility of each
source. Develop an essay that shows those evaluations and
connects them with a thesis that shows what all of your
evaluations add up to. Use the APA information in Week 1 to
format your in text citations and references.
Works sited
http://visionarybusinessjournal.wordpress.com/2011/08/30/how-
have-cell-phones-changed-us-socially-part-1/

http://www.studymode.com/essays/Cell-Phones-How-Have-
They-Changed-1542215.html
http://www.scientificamerican.com/article.cfm?id=how-your-
cell-phone-hurts-your-relationships
http://www.centertech.org/how-mobile-phones-have-changed-
our-lives.php
Assignment 3: Research Topic and Source Evaluation Essay
Revise the essay you posted in W2: Assignment 1 Discussion,
based on feedback you have received from your instructor and
your peers. Proofread your work carefully, ensuring that your
in-text citations and references page entries conform to APA
style.
By Tuesday, August 6, 2013, by 8:00pm Eastern time, submit
your revised essay via the W2: Assignment 3 Dropbox.
Assignment 3 Grading Criteria
Maximum Points
A clear thesis statement is located at the end of the first
paragraph.
5
Essay provides substantive evaluation of the credibility of eight
sources.
15
In-text citations conform to APA style and include author,
publication date, and page or paragraph numbers.
10
Essay has an ending that adequately concludes the paper.
5
References page contains a correctly formatted entry for each
source.

5
The essay itself is properly formatted, including a title on the
cover and at the top of second page and the word “References “
at the top of the references page, a cover page with proper
headers and the remainder of the paper with different but
correct headers.
5
Essay is free or virtually free of grammatical, mechanical, and
spelling errors.
5
Total:
50
Running Head: CYBER BULLYING ROUGH DRAFT
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CYBER BULLYING ROUGH DRAFT
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Cyber Bullying Rough Draft
Laura Dunkerson
South University Online
Cyber Bullying Rough Draft
The delete internet technology, one of the most important
innovations in the modern world, has increasingly influenced
how people interact as well as the way information is relayed
and how people use this information. Through a transition from
a broadcast dominated by reception to an ear of digitalized
community this doesn’t make sense, the world has witnessed a
rapid change in the way human beings interact and communicate
with each other. From my three choices in my essay V week 1, I
have decided to choose the topic cyber bullying in schools.
Cyber bullying will be discussed in details together with the
impact of cyber bullying as well as how to protect children from

online bullies. This essay utilizes reliable sources from
different scholarly journals. The introduction needs to provide
an accurate overview of the essay, which should focus on the
evaluation of the sources. Focus on the source evaluation and
lead to the reader a thesis about those evaluations.
To begin with, some of the scholarly journal V that I will use in
this essay will include, “Cyber bullying: Challenges and
strategies faced by juvenile police officers” no italics for
journal articles/just quotation marks by Thaxter Ken; and
“Editorial for the special issue on cyber-bullying” by
Englander, Elizabeth. Both V this word choice articles are
published in theJournal of Social Sciences journal titles are
italicized (Thaxter, 2010; Englander, 2010). Both V this word
choice articles have a common subject on V bullying; gender;
use commas instead of semicolons school environment and
violence. What do the evaluations of these articles show in
terms of their credibility? Editing ends here.
Another important cyber bullying scholarly journal article will
include “Traditional and Cyber Aggressors and Victims: A
Comparison of Psychosocial Characteristics” published in the
year 2011 in the Journal of Youth and Adolescence (Sontag,
Clemans, Graber & Lyndon, 2011). This article discusses on
differences between victims and perpetrators of cyber
aggression and traditional types of aggression. It will be
important to use this article in understanding bullying in both
perspectives and making suggestions of the necessary
prevention programs.
The article” Electronic bullying and victimization and life
satisfaction in middle school students”, a scholarly journal
published in Social Indicators research will also be imperative
in cyber bullying topic (Moore, Huebner, & Hills2012). This is
because it discuses such subject like bullying, victims of crime
and middle school students. This article will be imperative in

studying the nature as well as prevalence of electronic/cyber
bullying and victimization in schools. I will also use the article
“Is school bullying really on the rise?” which is also a scholarly
journal published inSocial Psychology of Education: An
International Journal (Rigby & Smith, 2011). Together, this
article will be relevant in my topic as it discusses such topics
like school environment; school violence; bullying, educational
psychology and student behavior.
Keith and Martin’s article on “Cyber-Bullying: Creating a
Culture of Respect in a Cyber World ” will also be important in
discuses how to deal with cyber bullying and keep a culture of
respect (Keith & Martin, (2005). Additionally, I will use the
article “Cyber-bullying, School Bullying, and Psychological
Distress: A Regional Census of High School Students”
published in the American Journal of Public Health in the year
2012. This article is a scholarly article and will be important in
explaining cyber bullying as well as school bullying and how it
is related to psychological stress. It will also be important in
explaining impacts of cyber bullying to students behavior and
school performance among others (Schneider, O'Donnell,
Stueve, & Coulter, 2012).
Finally, another type of sources that will be utilized in my cyber
bullying essay will include trade journals such as both 2011 and
2009 “Cyber bullying: Protecting kids and adults from online
bullies” by Sugarman and published in the choice (Sugarman,
2009; 2011). These articles will be imperative in providing
general information on cyber bullying as well as how to protect
our children from cyber bullying.
In conclusion, I believe all this sources will be effective in
discussing my topic on cyber bullying. All this sources contains
the right content that I need in analyzing my topic and coming

up with a solid paper on the topic. All the articles are reliable as
they are all scholarly articles.
Laura: This draft has a clear focus and useful information from
your sources, but the assignment requires the evaluation of the
eight sources from the SUO Library. In revision, use the
information in Week 1 to evaluation the sources. Develop body
paragraphs that examine each source’s credibility in terms of
author, source, references, etc. Then use those evaluations to
create a thesis that shows what the evaluations add up to. Also,
edit carefully for grammar and mechanics.
REFERENCE
Englander, E. K. (2010). Editorial for the special issue on
cyber-bullying. Journal of Social Sciences, 6(4), 508-509.
Retrieved from
http://search.proquest.com/docview/1026789363?accountid=139
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Keith, S., & Martin, M. E. (2005). Cyber-bullying: Creating a
culture of respect in a cyber world. Reclaiming Children and
Youth, 13(4), 224-228. Retrieved from
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Moore, P. M., Huebner, E. S., & Hills, K. J. (2012). Electronic
bullying and victimization and life satisfaction in middle school
students. Social Indicators Research, 107(3), 429-447.
http://dx.doi.org/10.1007/s11205-011-9856-z
Rigby, K., & Smith, P. K. (2011). Is school bullying really on
the rise? Social Psychology of Education : An International
Journal, 14(4), 441-455.
http://dx.doi.org/10.1007/s11218-011-9158-y
Schneider, S. K., O'Donnell, L., Stueve, A., & Coulter, R. W.

(2012). Cyberbullying, school bullying, and psychological
distress: A regional census of high school students. American
Journal of Public Health, 102(1), 171-7. Retrieved from
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Sontag, L. M., Clemans, K. H., Graber, J. A., & Lyndon, S. T.
(2011). Traditional and cyber aggressors and victims: A
comparison of psychosocial characteristics. Journal of Youth
and Adolescence, 40(4), 392-404. Retrieved from
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Sugarman, S. (2009). Cyber bullying: Protecting kids and adults
from online bullies. Choice, 47(2), 397. Retrieved from
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Sugarman, S. (2011). Cyber bullying: Protecting kids and adults
from online bullies. Choice, 48(10), 1851. Retrieved from
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Thaxter, K. (2010). Cyber bullying: Challenges and strategies
faced by juvenile police officers. Journal of Social Sciences,
6(4), 529-531. Retrieved from
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Running Head: EVALUATION OF SOURCES FOR NATURE
VERSUS NURTURE 1
EVALUATION OF SOURCES FOR NATURE VERSUS
NURTURE 7

Evaluation of Sources for Nature Versus Nurture
Hazel M Morrow
South University Online
Evaluation of Sources for Nature Versus Nurture
It is a long standing debate, nature versus nurture, genetics
versus environment. It has flowed back and forth over the years
as scientific advances bring new information to the populace.
The idea that people are a product of their environment, V of
how they were raised has been around for a long time. However,
even back before the study of genetics, people would say things
like, “It’s just how he is” or “She’s always been that way, even
though her parents are good [insert religious affiliation here]
folks.” These signs of possible non-environmental behaviors
have been around for a long time, delete comma as well. This is
an issue that has been extensively researched. It has been
looked at through the eyes of professionals in fields such as
gender-related studies, various disease-related research studies,
psychology, genetics, and even robotics. Because of this, there
is a lot of potential source material no matter which side of the
debate you decide to investigate. This makes it especially
difficult, but even more necessary, to verify the validity of

sources.
In the first article I examined, “Nature vs. Nurture: Emerging
Science of Epigenetics Takes Us to the Crossroads to Explain
What Causes Disease” from the Canada NewsWire, the author is
anonymous. This is not uncommon in internet, or even news,
sources. However, once I started reading through the article, the
credibility of it increased. The article uses Dr. Arturas Petronis
of the Centre for Addiction and Mental Health (CAMH) as the
primary source. The information and the accuracy of the article
seem to be solid. The article was written in 2010. While new
information may have emerged since then, nothing has emerged
to invalidate the information presented in the article since then.
This article is a good credible source for information. What is
the original location of the source? Is it credible? If you don’t
have an author, you have to look at the organization or
publication.
The next article I looked over was called “Goodbye Nature vs.
Nurture Debate” from the publication New Scientist. The author
of the article is Evelyn Fox Keller, an associate professor in
Arizona. I figured this was an extremely credible source. I
found the original article, “The Sound of Distant Drumming”. It
is in the section of the periodical called, “The Big Idea” which
is an opinion section. This lowered the credibly of the source
greatly for me. Then I learned that Evelyn Fox Keller is an
associate professor of history and philosophy of science. She is
not an expert in the field of genetics, behavioral studies or even
psychology. Better check her background before you make this
conclusion/she was trained as a physicist originally This
lowered the credibility of the article even more. The
information seems to be accurate. The article contains a lot of
good general information. It was also published in 2010, so
again timeliness might mean more information has emerged, but
not necessarily negated the information contained within the
article. Because of the author and its focus as an opinion piece,
however, I would use it as a source only with other sources
backing up the same information. Opinion in and of itself is not

a reason to doubt the credibility of a source. Evaluate the
information used to support the opinion.
The article “Pediatrics; beyond nature vs. nurture: Parental
guidance boosts child's strengths, shapes development” again
has an anonymous or unknown author. It is in the respected
psychology periodical Psychology & Psychiatry Journal which
raises its credibility greatly. Who respects the journal? How do
you know? The information that it contains is general, but
focused on child rearing. The information seem to be accurate.
The year 2010 is apparently the go-to year for this subject
because that is when this article is also published. The same
holds true for this as the previous articles in regards to
timeliness. It appears to be a very good credible source.
“The Threshold Hypothesis: Solving the Equation of Nurture vs.
Nature in Type 1 Diabetes” is a research document with four
different contributing authors. At least one of the authors is a
faculty member of the department of pathology at the University
of Florida’s College of Medicine. These two things make it a
strong credible source for the topic. The information within the
document is a very narrow representation of the overall subject
of my paper, however. The accuracy of the information is a bit
questionable, because the paper proposes a theory which is not
yet proven. It is published in 2011 which makes it more recently
researched and written than the previous articles. It could be a
decent source for very narrowly focused information as long as
it is noted that the information is theoretical.
Thomas Bartlett’s “The Puzzle of Boys” in The Chronicle of
Higher Education, is a great article regarding the gender-based
study group of the subject. Thomas Bartlett is a senior writer
for The Chronicle. He is not an expert in the field of nature
versus nurture. However, his article reviews many books on the
subject as related to boys and quotes many of the experts who
have written these books. Article itself contains information
gained from the books referenced and the information is
sometimes contradicting, but accurately portrayed. It was
written in 2009, which makes it so far one of the oldest among

the source material. I am not sure I would use this as a source,
though I might use one of the many books and publications that
are discussed within the article.
This next article focuses again on a narrow portion of the
subject, but it is a portion of the subject that is often discussed.
“Research Examines Traits; New Step Reported by Researchers
Trying to Untangle Nature vs Nurture” has an anonymous or
unknown author. Again, this is common in internet or news
publications. The information within the article, while specific,
has generalized ramifications that can be used to apply to the
subject. The accuracy of the article is uncertain, but seems it
seems to be valid. This was published in early 2009, so I would
prefer information that is a little more new. But the information
within should still be valid to subject and can be used as a
potential source.
The next source I looked at is “Nature vs. Nurture in Special
Education.” The author is an associate professor in special
education therefore she has some authority on the subject within
her article. This makes the article credible to me. The
publication is a scholarly journal, which makes it even more
credible. The information is seems to be accurate and is backed
up with several experts in the field of special education.
However, the information may be too narrowly focused for my
own paper. It was published in late 2009. While there might be
newer information available on the subject, there have not been
any great advances between then and now to invalidate the
information contained in the article. Because of the narrow
focus of the article, I would use it as a source only if this
subject is needed to support my thesis.
The final article I found to be one of the most useful of them
all. “Beyond Nature vs. Nurture” by authors Darlene Francis
and Daniela Kaufer was a good general article with strong solid
information. Darlene Francis is an assistant professor in the
University of California, Berkeley, School of Public Health-
Division of Community Health and Human Development.
Daniela Kaufer is an associate professor in the Department of

Integrative Biology and the Helen Wills Neuroscience Institute
at UC Berkeley. They have a fantastic background for
researching and understanding the topic. The article was written
in late 2011 in The Scientist. This article will definitely be one
I used for the paper.
For the most part, people seem to have widely varying opinions
and theories that fall somewhere in between the two extremes of
the nature versus nurture debate. Also, most people tend to
focus into a specific area of study and research the effects of
how genetics and environment affect that one small branch. This
makes finding research material difficult and time consuming.
However, it is a rewarding subject, so it can be well worth the
time involved in the research.
Hazel: This draft has a clear focus, a potential thesis, and some
useful evaluation of your sources. In revision, I have several
suggestions. First, review the suggestions regarding your
evaluations of the sources. Be careful with assumptions about
sources and authors. Second, work to vary your topic sentences
by focusing on the sources rather than your search process.
Third, clarify your thesis to show the reader how all of the
evaluations fit together.
References
Bartlett, T. (2009 November 22). The puzzle of boys. The
Chronicle of Higher Education. Retrieved from
http://chronicle.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/article/
The-Puzzle-of-Boys/49193/
Fox Keller, E. (2010 September 18) Goodbye nature vs. nurture
debate. New Scientist. Retrieved from
http://www.sciencedirect.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.ed
u/science/article/pii/S0262407910622774
Francis, D. & Kaufer, D. (2011 October 01). Beyond nature vs.
nurture. The Scientist, 25(10), 94. Retrieved from
http://elibrary.bigchalk.com
Marks, S. U. (2009). Nature vs. nurture in special education.
Phi Delta Kappan, 91(3), 80. Retrieved from

https://login.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/login?url=http:/
/search.proquest.com/docview/218476555?accountid=13931
NewsRx (2010 December 25). Pediatrics; beyond nature vs.
nurture: Parental guidance boosts child's strengths, shapes
development. Psychology & Psychiatry Journal, 41. Retrieved
from
Postmedia Network Inc. (2009 February 05). Research examines
traits; new step reported by researchers trying to untangle
nature vs nurture. The Times - Transcript. Retrieved from
PR Newswire Association LLC. (2010 June 10). Nature vs.
nurture: Emerging science of epigenetics takes us to the
crossroads to explain what causes disease. Canada NewsWire.
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Wasserfall, C., Nead, K., Mathews, C., & Atkinson, M. A.
(2011). The threshold hypothesis: Solving the equation of
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Hello Laura!
Within your rough draft, I had a hard time with your thesis. It
seemed really choppy and a bit confusing. I did get the point
that you were going to be writing an essay on cyber bullying,
but I think adding in the extra wording made it a bit confusing
for me. I do not have any concerns about your credibility of
sources, because they all seem like credible journal entries from
the SUO library. Cyber Bullying, Cyber Aggressors, and

Electronic Bullying seem to be your most credible and relate-
able sources. I'm not sure how the article "Editorial for the
special issue on Bullying" will help within your essay. This
seems to be the less reputable article of the bunch. I think this
essay has lead me to believe that you have located material that
is sufficient to your topic and will help you become more
knowledgeable about cyber bullying. The only issue I have with
your essay is there seems to be a lot of grammar and
punctuation issues, which lead me to having to re-read
sentences over and over to understand them correctly. I would
just suggest that you really read your essay over a few times out
loud before submitting it to make sure that you didn't miss
anything with the Spell checker and grammar. Overall, great
piece and good luck!
Thank you,
Katie Lewis

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