Hp211 class 13

AGENDA
QUIZ
Chamber of Secrets Quote Discussion
GPU: Appositives, sentence fragments
Review
◦ Introduction
◦ Thesis
Body Paragraphs
Conclusions:
◦ So What?
◦ Connect your essay to the world: Propose a course of Action
◦ Frame the essay by relating the ending to the beginning

Chamber of Secrets Quiz
1. (2 pts) According to Professor Binns’ telling of the “fanciful legend of the
Chamber of Secrets” (p. 150), who built the Chamber of Secrets (1 pt),
and who can open the Chamber of Secrets (1 pt)?
2. (2 pts) Why is Hermione trying to make a Polyjuice Potion?
3. (2 pts) What did Gilderoy Lockhart do to Harry’s arm after it got broken
during the Quidditch match?
BONUS (2 pts):
What is the meaning of “haphazardly” in this sentence from Chamber of
Secrets? (Choose A, B, or C) : Mrs. Weasley was clattering around,
cooking breakfast a little haphazardly, throwing dirty looks at her sons as
she threw sausages into the frying pan.
A. Without care; in a slapdash manner; B. Offensively bold; C. Look
suggestively or obliquely

In your Houses, discuss this quote and the question
that follows it:
“Professor Binns…had been speaking for half an hour when something
happened that had never happened before. Hermione put up her hand.
Professor Binns, glancing up…looked amazed.
“Miss –er--?”
“Granger, Professor. I was wondering if you could tell us anything
about the Chamber of Secrets,” said Hermione in a clear
voice….
“My subject is History of Magic,” he said in his dry, wheezy
voice. ‘I deal with facts, Miss Granger, not myths and legends.’…
Hermione’s hand was waving in the air again.
“Miss Granger?”
“Please, sir, don’t legends always have a basis in fact?”
Professor Binns was looking at her in such amazement, Harry was sure no
student had ever interrupted him before, alive or dead.” (p. 148-149)

In the quote on the previous page, discuss with your House members,
write down your answers, and be prepared to get up to the Overhead,
show your answers, and discuss with the entire class:
1) What is significant about Hermione’s behavior?
2) Two traits of Gryffindor are: Bravery, and Chivalry. How is Hermione’s
action an example of either or both of these traits?
3) How might her action be seen by other character(s)-- and name which
ones – as a positive or a negative aspect of the trait you explain in
question #3?

On the next slide are some sentences which need to be corrected and
edited to get rid of grammar errors and to be made more clear.
Work in your Houses to correct each sentence. Write out your revision of
each sentence clearly on a sheet of paper because you will go up to the
overhead to show how you fixed/edited it. Each House will take charge
of showing/presenting one sentence that they perfected. For example,
Griffindor can take #1, Hufflepuff #2, etc.
Professor Brian will go over these sentences with you and he will give you
a House point for each thing you do correctly in your perfected sentences.

1. One of the most loved series by many the stories are about fantasy
and some discoveries about the main character's life. Harry Potter and
the Sorcerer’s Stone.
2. He had not only enrolled into Hogwarts school of Witchcraft and
Wizardry but also learned how to use magic with the help of friends he
successfully obtained a magic stone and defeated Lord Voldemort.
3. The acting was fantastic especially how Harry played his role, in 2001
he was only 11 when he started acting back in 18 years ago.
4. The film throws you into this boy named
Harry’s life he lost his parents when he
was still an infant now he is an orphan
being taken care of by his aunt and uncle
however Harry is mistreated and neglected
as they treated him as filth.
5. Negative energy hindering his
surroundings almost making it impossible
to be at peace.

Grammar, Punctuation, Usage: Appositives
An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that renames another noun right
beside it. The appositive can be a short or long combination of words.
(the noun or pronoun will be in blue, the appositive will be in red).
Look at these appositive examples, all of which rename an arachnid:
The arachnid, a spider, is crawling down the kitchen wall.
The arachnid, a black widow spider, is crawling down the kitchen wall.
The arachnid, a large, black widow spider with hairy legs, is crawling
down the kitchen wall.
The arachnid, a large, hairy-legged, black widow spider that has spied
a fly, is crawling down the kitchen wall.

1. My brother's car, a sporty red convertible with bucket seats, is the envy
of my friends.
2. The chief surgeon, an expert in organ-transplant procedures, took her
nephew on a hospital tour.
An appositive phrase usually follows the word it explains or identifies, but it
may also precede it.
3. A bold innovator, Wassily Kandinsky is known for his colorful abstract
paintings.
4. The first state to ratify the U. S. Constitution, Delaware is rich in history.
5. A beautiful collie, Skip was my favorite dog.
From Purdue Owl. For more help go to:
https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/596/01/
More examples of appositives: note that when you remove the appositive phrase,
the sentence is still complete.

When the appositive begins the sentence, it looks like this:
1. Characterized as feelings of despondency and dejection,
depression hurts the victim and disrupts families.
When the appositive interrupts the sentence, it looks like this:
2. Anger, a strong feeling of annoyance, displeasure, or hostility,
causes the adrenal glands flood the body with stress hormones.
And when the appositive ends the sentence, it looks like this:
3. Mary suffers from extreme nervousness, a trait that causes her to
be easily agitated or alarmed
Working in your houses, and using the examples below as models, write at
least three appositive phrases—one at the beginning of a sentence, one in the
middle, and one at the end. Write sentences that use or define a trait you have
chosen.

Look at your introduction
1. Do you have three paragraphs? Count them.
2. Do you have a definition from a reliable source?
Underline it
3. Have you defined the trait in your own words?
Underline it.
4. Have you included an explanation from an outside
article? Underline it.
5. Does your introduction distinguish between types or
positive and negative traits? Underline that part too.
6. Have you explained the trait by giving examples you
have come up with yourself? Identify and underline
these examples.
7. Find and underline the thesis statement.

Review your thesis : Does it
do the following?
1. Name your trait?
2. Divide the explanation of this concept into parts to
make it easier for readers to understand?
1. Does it point out both a positive and negative outcome
of the trait?
2. Does it divide the trait into different aspects of the trait?
3. Assert which character demonstrates the trait?

Body Paragraphs: Structure and Content
Have you asserted a POINT about your character that supports your THESIS?
Have you provided context (background) for the point. In other words, have you
provided information about your character and/or about the scene you are going to
introduce in your illustration?
Have you ILLUSTRATED your point by providing your first example from the text?
Have you EXPLAINED how your quotation connects to both the POINT you have
made in your paragraph and to your THESIS?
Have you ILLUSTRATED your point by providing your second example from the text?
Have you EXPLAINED how your second quotation connects
to both the POINT you have made in your paragraph and to
your THESIS?
Have you provided a TRANSITION to help your reader
prepare for your next point?

In-Class Writing:
Conclusions
Conclusions:
Frame the essay by relating the ending to the
beginning
So What?
Connect your essay to the world: Propose a
course of Action

HOMEWORK
Finish HP Chapter 18 327-end.
HW Discussion 10
Bring: two copies of your entire draft to our
next meeting. Minimum requirements: Intro
(should be multiple paragraphs, describing and
defining the trait, with citations), thesis, three
body paragraphs, focused on multiple aspects
of ONE character trait via ONE character from
Harry Potter, and a conclusion, using one or
more of the strategies we discussed in class.
This should be at least three complete pages
plus a works cited page.

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