Improvments fmp production
- 1. Improvements Over Time (Production FMP) By Liberty Whitehorn
- 2. First Draft Of Front Cover: This was changed because it didn’t link with the poetry I chose through out my book. Third Draft Of Front Cover: I changed the thickness of a few lines and then added my own individual style to the front cover. Second Draft Of Front Cover: The lines were too thick and harsh. Plus this cover didn’t link into my illustrations because it didn’t show a individual style.
- 3. First Draft of this poem: The design for the first draft is basic and boring. It also doesn’t show an individual style which was the key part of this whole project. The shapes are also basic which makes the overall design basic. Second Draft: This design is more complex and represents my own individual design rather well. One aspect I could improve on is moving the font to make it clearer to read for the audience. I could also try a simple lay out instead of it being David Carson inspired.
- 4. First Draft: The first draft of this poem is bold. However, half way through I decided to change the theme of the backgrounds. This is because I felt like I could be more adventurous. Second Draft: The second draft of this poem is similar to the first draft but I have changed the background so that it goes with the same theme. I also used my signature dotted lines to make the piece more personal. Third Draft: The third draft I tried to make it seem more like I women. This is why I tried to add in figures which would still make the piece powerful. It also adds more detail to the design. I also included bullets to empathies the ‘battleground’ aspect of the poem.
- 5. First draft: For the first draft of my work I used a similar aspect to another one of my poems. This made my work more unoriginal which lead for a non effective piece of work. The font was also squished which made the font hard to read. Second Draft: For the second draft I expanded on making the heart more detailed and added in flowers and more detailed aspects to make my work more complex and interesting. Overall, I feel like this piece of illustration is really effective/
- 6. These two pieces of work are poems that I ended up not using. This is because my first illustrations are basic and very similar to what has already been done. This again, doesn’t explore my individual design which is the main purpose of this project. I also felt like my ideas after these edits were too basic and wasn’t challenging enough. This is why I havent used this poem.
- 7. This piece of work is another piece which I havent included in my book. This is because the design is basic and the illustrations aren’t detailed enough to make this effective. I also felt like the poem was too long and because I am trying to concentrate mainly on my illustrations it caused the piece to be ineffective. I also feel like the colours were harsh and didn’t link to a theme. I also felt like I couldn’t develop this poem further and make It effective at the same time, which lead for me to change the poem.
- 8. First Draft: The first draft of this poem is simple and not similar to the other pages. Even though the sun is effective, I need to make it more complicated. Second Draft: I tried to include my own individual design to this page. This worked effective but I still felt like I could push this further and make it more detailed. Third Draft: I tried to make the water/waves more detailed. This works effectively because it goes with my illustration style well.
- 9. First Draft: The idea for this poem is interesting and links to my theme. However, I know I could develop this further. For example: making my own sticker of a leaf instead of using the one already on Photoshop. I could also add more detail to the woman. Also, I could re think the positioning of the font. Second Draft: I have made my own sticker and used it as the background. I have also added more detailed to the woman, by making her hair more detailed as well as her body. I have also moved the font so that the audience reads a few sentences together and then moves on to the rest of the poetry. This allows a pause.
- 10. First Draft: The first draft of my back cover looks rushed and not thought about. For example: the graphic of Rupi Kaur is basic and looks messy. I also changed the background colour because as production went on I realised that I did better illustrations on a white background. Second Draft: The second draft of my back cover contains a lot more detail I have used my own style to create a hand drawn buy graphic looking effect. I have also added a lot of detail to her clothes and hair which has allowed the piece to become more effective.
- 11. First Edit: The first edit for this poem works well. However, I needed to make the background leafs unique and I felt like the font needed changing. Second Draft: The second draft of the poem works well because It is more unique. For example: I have created my own sticker on Photoshop which has allowed my illustrations to be more personalised. I have also changed the font so that it is easier and clearer to read. This makes my work more effective.
- 12. This is the first edit I have made of my FMP which is David Carson inspired. I have decided to go with a more simple font to see if this works better, as that is normally how poetry is set out. This how allowed me to explore different options. The only thing I can say is bad about using a more simple font is I feel like there is a empty space which causes the illustrations to be more spacious.