Assignment 11 draft 4 part 1
- 1. A Assignment 11 Group Presentation Draft 4
- 2. Kaya Sumbland Sanel Homer A Rahel Fasil Gia Alveranga
- 3. Slide not improved A A DRAFT TWO FEEDBACK DRAFT 2 FEEDBACK
- 4. Slide not improved A TEACHER ASSESSMENT (draft 3)
- 5. A PEER ASSESSMENT (draft 3) BY DEBBIE, MARIA & MILKA Slide not improved
- 6. DRAFT 1 O.S TEACHER FEEDBACK
- 7. DRAFT 1 O.S PEER ASSESMENT DRAFT 1 O.S SELF ASSESMENT
- 8. Slide not improved Kaya Sumbland - D Record of Grade for draft 1 What Went Well: (Individual) • Clear presentation and organisation • • Excellent structure Good understanding B Even Better If: • More detail • Use more images • Take real pictures of characters Targets to Improve: • To explain my points in a PEE structure and use a verity of images. Sanel Homer - U What Went Well: • Good organisation • Nice diagrams • Good understanding of chosen theme Even Better If: • Relate my pictures to the words • Less text • More detail Targets to Improve: • Make sure my diagrams are not to basic and shorted lengthy paragraphs into bullet points.
- 9. Record of Grade for draft 1 B (Individual) Gia Alveranga - U What Went Well: Even Better If: • Used more brief points • Showed more pictures Targets to Improve: • to show Slides have good organisation Rahel Fasil - E What Went Well: • Short brief points Even Better If: • Use titles for slides • More detail • Make sure I present my knowledge more clearly Targets to Improve: • Use more images and less text Slide not improved
- 10. Kaya & Sanel Slide not improved Record of Grade for draft 1 Presentation Level – D- Group B What went well? • Showing progress and achievement • Slides have good organisation • Good effort and creativity • Good start to conventions Even better if? • Colour code should be background • Title all the slides • More contribution from Sanel, Rahel and Gia • Don’t read from the screen Targets to improve… • To make sure all group members contribute • Write our presentation with more detail and understanding • To word our idea’s better
- 11. Slide not improved Kaya & Sanel Decisions and Revisions C Since our first draft, we’ve changed our idea a lot. DRAFT 1 : • Thriller genre • Based on a girl who had schizophrenia and thought she was possessed • Too complicated and sent out the wrong message about the mental illness. DRAFT 2 : • Completely same idea • Mental illness taken out – wrong message • Replaced with actually being possessed
- 12. Slide not improved Kaya & Sanel Decisions and Revisions C CHANGE IN IDEA : • We decided to change idea completely • Drama genre • We did research again on conventions • We want to connect with the audience • New idea was a girl’s life on drugs and her hallucinations Draft one of ALTERED IDEA : opening sequence • Idea suits more to a thriller • Change drugs to mental illness • Hallucination - > Bizarre delusions • Change to psychological thriller • Alter flashbacks to match new concept • Girl with schizophrenia who is being emotionally connected to toys from her real parents
- 13. Decisions and Revisions Draft one of opening sequence After receiving feedback from the first draft of our opening sequence, as a group we decided to change the genre and idea for our second draft. This was because the hallucination characters and dolls were too confusing. Also, our target audience didn’t understand that the main character was schizophrenic. Our opening sequence genre is now a Thriller and our idea is about a girl who’s new home is haunted.
- 14. Slide not improved Kaya Decisions and Revisions C HOW THE CHANGES HAVE HELPED: • Explored various genre’s creating a varied understanding of the differences • Wider understanding of different themes and topics • Exercise our creativity and to stimulate greater idea’s each time Our changes in pictures!!
- 15. Genre D Sanel THRILLER • We want to do this genre because it will keep our audience engaged and interested in the film. • It has many diverse ways of creating enigma. • We feel as a group we can challenge and meet the conventions. • Also we like thought of being scared. • A large majority of our target audience find thriller’s more exciting than other genre’s.
- 16. Why we stayed with Thriller from draft 1 Sanel D •This genre has stayed the same from Draft one as we thought Thriller would be the best option for our group as we know a lot about thriller movies and did a lot of research about thriller and how to scare people. •Also we thought that the audience would be interested in a thriller as it allows them to have the feeling of being scared and keeps them on the edge of their feet.
- 17. Kaya Examples of thriller films Devil – 2010 Devil is a thriller film because throughout the film you don’t know who the devil is and it really thrills you to figure out who the devil is throughout the film and at the end when you find out who it is it really shocks you. Also at the end of the film you think that everything is solved but its not.
- 18. Kaya Examples of thriller films Buried – 2010 Buried is a thriller because throughout the movie your always anticipating to see what will happen next, to him in the coffin/box. Also at then end when the sand is pouring in and he’s about to be saved it builds up all this excitement but, when you find out they got the wrong guy, it really shocks you.
- 19. D.a Supernatural Suspense THRILLER Relief at Conventions Shock the end False Villain/ Victim ending
- 20. Convention Use / Develop / Purpose and Examples from Thriller Challenge Description Films False Ending Challenge – Something Purpose – To keep the Paranormal Activity demonic and scary giving audience thinking; Cliff false hope. Keeping hanger. Change the way audience scared not just you view curtain annoyed. situations. Description – We through there would be a new equilibrium, but it ended with a cliff hanger and the Ending – Demon still in her. demon is still inside her. Innocent Use – Young girl. Purpose – To make the Disappearance of Alice Challenge – Almost audience feel sympathy Creed Victims being the villain, the for the character and to victim ends up killing the shock from her killing the villain. villain Description – At the end of the film the woman taken hostage ends up killing the men that took her showing no remorse over it. The Victim kills the villain. Kaya Sanel Gia Rahel
- 21. Convention Use / Develop / Purpose and Examples from Thriller Challenge Description Films Use (villain) – Can’t see You don’t see the Psycho Villain and details, remains a villain killing nor who Victim mystery. they are killing the Use (victim) – An attractive innocent woman in the shower, woman. it makes the audience wonder who it is. Develop (villain) – You Scream can hear that it’s a male The villain is a male in their voice, not that and you see the girl he much of a mystery. Develop (victim)– Both killed hurt but you makes and females, you don’t see how he killed can see them hurt but her or the gory details. not them getting hurt. House of wax Challenge (villain) – Very The victim is a male who shy and insecure. is killed by a shy and Challenge (victim) – vulnerable villain, you see Male, showing him in a the victims get killed and gore like manner hurt. in detail what it looks like. Kaya Sanel Gia Rahel
- 22. Convention Use / Develop / Purpose and Examples from Thriller Challenge Description Films Escaped Use – Middle aged male. Purpose – To show the Law abiding Citizen Develop – Female. mentality of the character convicts – how smart and cunning they are. Description – The man planned his escape from prison before her went in to out smart the police and get justice. Planning an escape from prison. Challenge – Making it Purpose – To shock the The Human Centipede Shock horrific and unexpected. audience, showing a real Not predictable . life situation in a Disturbing. disturbing and terrifying manner. Description – The villain holds 3 people hostage and shocks the audience in doing some extremely unexpected disgusting the Takes people hostage and audience creates them into a human centipede. Kaya Sanel Gia Rahel